高分作文标志
1：是否长短句交叉;
2、是否会使用插入语;
3、用词是否多样，准确，形象，尽量使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球的闪光词;
4、关键词是否换用，切勿老用重复词;
5、句型使用是否准确、地道。
下面给出写好一篇作文的注意事项：
1.适当用被动替换主动，这样能更客观的反映事实,句子开头不要总是用we/I(比如写结尾时不用weshouldpay attention to而用Attention should be paidto.)举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的最后一段：Itis,therefore, high time that some applicable approacheswereimplemented by the service industry like that. Bydoingso，its competitive edge will be sharpenedeffectively.
2.善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。
如however / therefore /forexample/Ibelieve做插入语放在中间，一般放在动词，助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。
比如说：Otherindividuals, however, take the attitude that …
3.一定要学会换词，换形象，具体的替换太宽泛的。(考试中一般不要出现good,bad, many, thing, think,
people,opinion等等)比如上面例子中，applicable替换proper,approaches替换ways,implement替换carryout, sharpen one’scompetitiveedge替换enhanceone’scompetitiveness(提高某物竞争力)
下面举一篇南京工程学院某位同学写的优秀作文(14分)的例子，看看他是如何运用各类写作技巧的。这位同学把老师上课讲的各类写作手法和精彩替换和句型都用上了，作文有了很大的提高。
Computer and I ( By Simmy )
I never forget the exceedingly thrilling daywhenmy mother bought me a computer as birthday present, whichexerted atremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself ingooglingan army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy asea ofmelodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feelingthatthe whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly 替换 very
thrilling 替换 exciting
sth. exert a tremendous fascination onsb替换 sb. be interested in sth.
google 替换 search
an army of 替换 a lot of
The dawn of the new century witnessedtheincreasing popularity of computers. Coincident with theadvancementof science and technology, computers pouring into thecurrentsociety as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals.It is noexaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, inlargemeasure!
The dawn of the new centurywitnessed是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情;Increasingpopularity替换 more and more popular
Coincident with…非常地道的句型，表达“与…一致”的意思，替换With…
Advancement 替换 development
Pour into ( flood into / swarminto)替换 enter into
Current ( currently )替换 now
Appeal to sb. 替换 sb. beinterestedin sth.
Growing individuals 替换 moreandmore people
It is no exaggeration tosay经典句型，说某事是毫不夸张的
For a start, we can, freely, searchdesiredinformation at any moment . Little by little, our knowledgewill bewell enriched, and our horizons will be greatlybroadened.Additionally, we can get huge recreations online bychatting,playing games, or delivering email.
For a start 替换 To begin with
We can, freely,search用了插入语的写作手法
our knowledge will be well enriched, andourhorizons will be greatlybroadened.用了非常精彩的被动
Additionally 替换 In addition/Besides
Deliver 替换 send
There is no denying that , however, computerscann in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especiallythegrowing violence ,***, porn pictures, AV-films emerging onthescreen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.
There is no denying that , however, computerscann in the disservice of humanbeings,这个句子有三个精彩之处，首先Thereisnodenyingthat这个句型，还有however作为插入语，nin the disservice of 替换 do harm to
Emerging 替换 appearing (fading替换 disappearing )
Netcitizen网民，属于精彩用词
As a classic proverb goes that no garden hasnoweeds. Computers do play a positive role in the developmentofpeople lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. Weshould,therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid theoppositefacet.
No garden has no weeds 替换Everycoin has two sides
Computers do play，do强调
Positive 替换 important /good等
A slice of 替换 a part of
Unfavorable 替换 bad
Impacts 替换 effects/influences
We should, therefore, take advantage of…使用插入语
Fruits(而且fruits用的非常形象，merits/virtues) 替换 advantage ( defects替换disadvantage ) Facet 替换aspect
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